EVALUATION OF FIRST DRAFT: How we are going to change the video from the first draft (GROUP)

Our first drafts don't really get a hold of the fact that the main artist is dead and she is in an abusive relationship.

SCRIPT:

We have decided to have a second acting part later in the video to explain the first part, which explains how she died and how bad her relationship was.

The script will be published tomorrow.

Then we are going to film these bits later.

CLIPS:
Instead of the main artist looking back on her life, we are going to have her boyfriend look back and have the main artist look over him from the afterlife. 

We are thinking of keeping the den bit where they build it and then he destroys it from anger.

We need to do more filming to show that their relationship wasn't always that happy as seen in my first draft and in the photos on the fridge.